Introduction:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1439_-FHaJALppU047ezlzh1JOXv6lHd8Ox-aJ0tVX9I/edit?hl=en#
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1439_-FHaJALppU047ezlzh1JOXv6lHd8Ox-aJ0tVX9I/edit?hl=en#
My body paragraph: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eUEkCI6r9SHHRh5jlEY08ju7VlS5Rg56vU9qDgeTkBY/edit?hl=en#
Conclusion:
My paragraph, on the motive for lying of pursuit of pleasure, is more or less the same as it was before, only I've changed some wording for clarity. I changed one of the commentary sentences on the point about John Worthing pretending to have a brother called Ernest, but the word choice isn't much different, and so it shouldn't cause repetition in the essay. Do you think that there are any repetitive words in my paragraph on its own? I've also made some changes to your guys' essays, such as add transitions at the beginning, to make them fit better into the essay as a whole.
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